Welcome to Friday! Are you excited for this week's edition of Five Sentence Fiction? I hope so. This week's prompt is awkward. If you'd like to learn more about Five Sentence Fiction, and maybe give it a try yourself, just visit Lillie McFerrin Writes. Enjoy!
They didn't see her. Not until it was too late. She stood just behind them, her face glowing red, her eyes filling up with tears. They coughed and sputtered vainly for excuses, for a way out, but there were none. Everyone shifted uncomfortably, sharing a single mutual thought: "awkward".
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Succinct but you paint the picture perfectly. Nice work!
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ReplyDeleteShort but packed full of emotion, nice work :)
ReplyDeleteDoesn't matter what they said or did, you captured the moment very nicely.
ReplyDeleteVery nicely written. How many times have we all been there, done that, and how we have shifted from foot to foot and thought, "Awkward." Got me into the moment. Nice job. Randy
ReplyDeleteI could identify with both sides here having been there - truly awkward. Great job.
ReplyDeleteI loved this. Well done. I'm new here...
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Welcome! I'll be sure to check out your blog!
DeleteThank you all so much! Your comments are so thoughtful. I really appreciate it!
ReplyDeleteOne word - BUSTED!
ReplyDeleteGreat job Melanie!
A truly horrible moment in anyone's life! Very well written!
ReplyDeleteFive delightfully short sentences that paint such a vivid picture.
ReplyDeleteThere's something about embarrassment that hits home with all of us. I think everyone's been on at least one side of that scenario at some point in their lives, and they probably won't ever forget it! Thank you all so much for chiming in!
ReplyDeleteOh, ouch. Such a painful moment, beautifully captured.
ReplyDeleteYikes! You've really captured the moment perfectly in these tight sentences. Nice work!!!
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